I’m working on a architecture question and need support to help me understand better.

I wrote a paper that didn’t meet the assignment requirements and I need someone to fix it (properly rewrite the whole paper)

This was the professors comments along other comments in the doc

I do have some comments on the paper, as written (see attachment). I’ve no doubt that you learned a great deal through the broad survey of the history of cities. However, it’s essential for any paper to tailor the content to the format. The historical overview is a very ambitious undertaking, and there is the risk is falling into statements of excessive generality, without supporting information: a study like this would need to be substantially larger in order to provide a convincing level of evidence to support the more general conclusions (consider Spiro Kostov’s lengthy two-volume series, The City Shaped and The City Assembled). In a relatively short paper, it would be better to focus on selective examples and compare them in detail; for example, you might have selected one gridded city from the Roman period, one medieval city, and one Renaissance city to show how they differ with respect to street pattern, edges, the location of important civic and religious features, the arrangement of districts, building types, and other qualities that we’ve discussed in class. However, I do need to state again that a paper on that subject would be for another course, perhaps a course in the history of the city; it would not meet the requirements for the semester paper for our course.

the paper conveys the impression that you have drawn from many sources but have not composed the materials into an argument with a clear thesis. For any paper, you should ask yourself, What is the main point I’m trying to convey, and does the paper achieve this? The main point should be stated clearly in an introduction, should be referenced throughout the paper, and should be returned to in the conclusion. Other themes of course can be introduced, but they should be subordinate to the main thesis.